If you haven’t seen the recent BBC series “Sherlock“, what follows probably won’t mean very much to you. So, feel free to skip over this. IF you have seen it….
Some time back, before the BBC show was announced and before I knew that it was happening, I had an (what I thought was a brilliant) idea that involved updating Sherlock Holmes. Bringing him into the 21st century. I talked to a couple of fine folks at a couple of small comic companies (who were also, apparently, blissfully unaware of the coming BBC show) and they both said to put together a pitch. Amanda (Hayes, my partner on The Invisible Skein) liked the idea and started working up some character designs. I put together a few pages of rough. 1st draft sample script (which you’ll find below).
Now, I’m not saying that Mark and Stephen (the creators of the BBC show) somehow read my mind or anything. I’m sure their show was well under way at this point. But damn. If you’ve seen the first episode… well, just read what’s below and you’ll understand.
SCARLET STUDIES REDUX
PAGE 1 (6 Panels in a grid, 2 across, 3 down)
Panel 1 – An outside shot of a bar in a dingy Baltimore neighborhood. It’s the corner business on the block and a cheap neon sign reading beer glows in the window. One of the “e”’s is out, so only BE R actually lights up.
CAPTION: Baltimore, MD June 2010
Panel 2 – Interior of the bar, which is almost empty. Two men sit at a booth in the corner. One of the men is John Watson, the other is his friend, Stamford.
STAMFORD: You’re looking better, John.
Panel 3 – Close up on Watson.
WATSON: I wish I could say I was feeling better. My leg is killing me and I need to find an apartment soon. I can’t afford to keep staying at the hotel. I’ll be broke in a month.
Panel 4 – Close up of Stamford
STAMFORD: Yes, I’ve been thinking about that. I might be able to help.
Panel 5 – Slightly wider angle, but clear on Watson’s face. His face has perked up a bit.
WATSON: How?
Panel 6 – Same wider angle but with a view of Stamford’s face.
STAMFORD: I have a friend looking for a roommate. But I have to warn you, he’s a bit odd…
PAGE 2 (5 Panels, Similar grid, but the center row is all one panel.)
Panel 1 – Outside shot of the hospital morgue. A sign on the door reads Morgue nice and clear. Watson and Stamford are standing outside the door.
CAPTION: The next day.
WATSON: The morgue? Is he a medical man?
Panel 2 – Stamford opening the door and leading Watson inside.
STAMFORD: Not so much.
Panel 3 – Our first look at Holmes, gleefully swinging a baseball bat at the back of a corpse lying on a metal gurney.
Panel 4 – A closer shot as the bat hits the corpse with a thwacking noise.
Panel 5 – Reaction shot of Watson and Stamford. Watson looks horrified. Stamford looks amused.
PAGE 3 (6 panel grid, like page 1)
Panel 1 – Holmes smiling and laying aside the bat.
HOLMES: Dr. Watson, glad to be back from Afghanistan?
Panel 2 – Watson looking shocked.
WATSON: How the hell…?
Panel 3 – Holmes waving a hand, dismissively.
HOLMES: It’s nothing.
Panel 4 – Watson and Stamford. Watson is starting to look angry, Stamford is starting to look bored.
WATSON: You’ve been checking on me? Stamford told you I was coming?
Panel 5 – Holmes
HOLMES: Of course not. I had no idea who you were when you walked through that door. I see, I deduce.
Panel 6 – Watson
WATSON: Then explain yourself.
PAGE 4 (another 6 panel grid)
(Some of the panels should focus on Holmes as he speaks, others on the parts of Watson that he’s speaking about. Your decision as to which should be which.)
Panel 1
HOLMES: You carry yourself like a military man. It’s in the shoulders. But your hands are soft, well manicured. So not infantry. Leaves many possibilities, but you’re friends with Stamford and he’s a surgeon, so doctor is a fair guess.
Panel 2
HOLMES: Your cane is new. The ferrule is barely worn. So, a recent injury, perhaps one that would involve your release from active duty.
Panel 3
HOLMES: The pattern of the scarf you wear, while not unique, is common to the villages along the Afghan/Pakistan border.
Panel 4
WATSON: And my name?
Panel 5
HOLMES: Ah, that. There was an article in the paper last week about a returning war hero, a doctor who was injured, shrapnel in the leg, I believe. Saved a young woman caught in a crossfire just outside of Kabul.
Panel 6
HOLMES: With the deductions I had already made about you, it didn’t seem like much of a leap to conclude that you and that doctor were one and the same.